27 Oct 2008 Neil E. Das despite the maple despite the maple leaves incarnadine her heart still weighs the dimness Share this: Email a link to a friend (Opens in new window) Email Print (Opens in new window) Print Share on Facebook (Opens in new window) Facebook Share on Pinterest (Opens in new window) Pinterest Share on X (Opens in new window) X Like this:Like Loading… Related
I am wrestling a bit with not having punctuated this one. Here is how I mean it to flow: despite the maple leaves incarnadine, her heart still weighs the dimness though, the phrase “leaves incarnadine her heart” is somewhat more evocative unpunctuated. Loading... Reply
Yes :>) it may be not so clear. The comma is pointless. By the meaning we guess it. Merely beautiful without. Loading... Reply
I am wrestling a bit with not having punctuated this one. Here is how I mean it to flow:
despite the maple
leaves incarnadine, her heart
still weighs the dimness
though, the phrase “leaves incarnadine her heart” is somewhat more evocative unpunctuated.
Very nice Haïku. And I agree with you, the invisible comma is evocated alone.
Mae
Mae, I do not understand. Do you think it is better with our without the comma.
Yes :>) it may be not so clear. The comma is pointless. By the meaning we guess it.
Merely beautiful without.