i like the stars at dusk
one or two
that nestle in the blue
of a slowly darkening sky
as if they too
were only mirrors
like the moon
and hung within
the tether range of earth
i like the stars at dusk
one or two
that nestle in the blue
of a slowly darkening sky
as if they too
were only mirrors
like the moon
and hung within
the tether range of earth
This is gorgeous Neil! The word “tether” fits beautifully. If this poem were a color it would be deep blues and golds-again reminding me of “Starry Night” Very nice. This is a “reprint”? When did you post it? Not sure why I can’t remember it.
Thank you, Heidi. Do you think I should take out the word “range”? It would mess with the meter a bit, though.
Grammatically, you don’t need the word “range” because tether can serve as a true noun. Now that you mention it, I do like the flow better without it.
Also, if you want the BIG brown frame back, you can have it. I was able to use the smaller one, I just need to resize the small frame’s mat. Thanks!
Please leave range in, I personally like the rhythm better with it (Sorry Heidi!)